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altamira16
Dec. 21st, 2008 01:02 pm (UTC)
I watched. I liked the first part. Then I got confused. Love your shiny head.
eriktrips
Dec. 21st, 2008 10:38 pm (UTC)
confusion is a fine place for a poem to lead you to. I might post the words a little later, but I can't guarantee that that will help.
daisydumont
Dec. 21st, 2008 01:58 pm (UTC)
oh, i liked hearing you read! (had to look up the word just now, though i should've already known it.) good imagery, and i particularly liked the "what the hell."
eriktrips
Dec. 21st, 2008 10:39 pm (UTC)
thank you! and thank you! ;)
daisydumont
Dec. 21st, 2008 10:43 pm (UTC)
you're welcome, twice. :D
oldcroaker
Dec. 21st, 2008 03:07 pm (UTC)
I like, I like.

I think for the street corner the delivery needs to be short staccato rather Lenny Bruce style. The late nighters need short brain train messages. (in case you are still doing it) and yes just my humble opinion.
eriktrips
Dec. 21st, 2008 10:37 pm (UTC)
well, they're pretty much going to get what I write: long run-on sentences that hit about ten thousand topics before they finally peter out.

I have a few pieces that consist of single words one right after the other. so far, they haven't gotten any more attention than anything else, but it's early. we'll have to see.

Edited at 2008-12-21 10:40 pm (UTC)
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